By
Glenn Fredric
46 Mary St, Richmond
Invercargill, New Zealand 9810
0224136433
thehammerklau@gmail.com
FADE IN:
EXT. COBBLED ALLEYWAY - DAWN
EXT. COBBLED ALLEYWAY - DAWN
A silhouette hobbles down the street, one
armed and on a crutch, he walks as if on the points on unsteady stilts. He
stops at a notice board, then stutters back into a small puddle.
EXT. BOAT DECK – MIDDAY
Fade to visions of a woman in a green dress
having her throat cut, arm reaching out, then looking towards the boat side
where a burly man hold a young woman. She’s dropped into the water. The camera
charges forwards, arms come from out of scene and they dive in to the water
after the falling woman.
Sharks, stabbing, being bitten, fades to red.
EXT. COBBELED ALLEYWAY - DAWN
The man grimaces as he remembers the pain
of the wounds. Then stabs the board, and hobbles away.
A commoner runs to the board, we see a
series of wanted posters on the board, the dagger sticks from the face of the
one dubbed “Amryn Blacktooth”. Around the hilt, a piece of delicate green cloth
hangs and sways in the wind.
INT. WORKSHOP - MORNING
The door slams open, young woman sits at
her table in the center of the shop. Wooden limbs everywhere in the workshop, a
bunny in her hands, green light seeps from her fingertips. They argue. Titus
wants his daughter Cassandra to be ready, they finally have a path to vengeance
for her mother, and Cassandra feels she needs another week. Titus states she
has till morning. The rabbit jumps from her hands and out the door. He smiles
and gently closes the door and walks away.
EXT. DOCKS – MIDDAY
Titus is talking with the port master,
signing release of his ship. Titus asks about crew, port master shows his ship
is covered in crew.
Oraf’r Snofl’son walks towards him on the
gangways, a hilt forward facing in his hands with a delicate piece of green
cloth wrapped around it. Titus smiles as Oraf’r pats him on the back, and asks
when they leave. Titus lets him know in the morning. Oraf’r rallies the crew.
And Titus walks away with a strong stride in his hobble.
EXT. ONYXIAN SKYFALL (BOAT) – EARLY MORNING
Sails billow and the ship pulls from dock,
long shot.
EXT. ONYXIAN SKYFALL (BOAT) CAPTAINS
QUARTERS – LATE NIGHT
Titus lies on a lounger, his stubs showing
crutches at his side. They are in argument, he wants it now, she doesn’t have
the power to have the limbs last long enough without a power source. He demands
it. She touches her arm, closes her eyes, light emits from behind her lids and
it runs down her veins into her fingers then into his limbs and from the stubs
the plant like limbs grow.
Cut to outside of ship, screams, storm
starts to brew.
EXT. ONYXIAN SKYFALL DECK CLOSE TO A
CRAGGED ISLE
Rain pouring down, woman with glowing eyes
yells. Titan paces out on his crutch, water pouring over him from the poopdeck
above. Look to the water and see an eerily white ship, with red seeping
through. Be it algae or blood, indeterminate. He rallies the troops. Titus
falters as the waves bash the side of the ship and slips. His lieutenants try
to make orders to stay at range or to retreat, he stands, refusing, lily will
have vengeance this day. He nods to the female, Fraga, with the glowing eyes, a
star born conjuror, and she closes her eyes and claps her hands together. A
rumble comes from the heavens and molten meteor falls from the sky. Titus grips
to the railing. A black light fills the sky then disappears, the meteor breaks
in two then explodes, its embers burn through the white ship’s sails and it
slows in the stormy water. The woman apologizes for missing, he reassures her they
shall fight face to face. The white ship heads into the shoals and cragged
shore of the isle. The Onyxian follows.
EXT. ONYXIAN SKYFALL DECK ADJACENT TO THE
WHITE SHIP, CLOSE TO A CRAGGED ISLE
The ONYXIAN SKYFALL catches up to the WHITE
SHIP bare they unload their cannons in to ship. The black light fills the area
again and then disappears, the cannon balls ripped to pieces. A shirtless man with
a black amulet and black scythe stands on the white ship’s railings, a smirk in
his eyes. Fraga engages him. A blood golem jumps from the white ship to the Onyxian,
aiming for Titus at the helm. Oraf’r transforms into his ice bound form and intercept
tackles it to the deck, their fight ensues.
As men and lieutenants fight it out,
swinging from ship to ship, Titus notices a figure swing to an outcrop of rocks
below, bandaged, with his one orange glowing eye and his pirate captain hat, Titus
sees Amyrn Blacktooth. Cassandra tells him to stay and that it isn’t worth it,
Titus grabs the rope with his good arm, his cutlass equipped,
fingers intertwined with the remnants of lily’s dress and swings to the
rocks below.
EXT. CRAGGED ISLE ROCKS
The two face each other off, Titus and
Amryn. Titus standing a full head above Amryn, but hunched on his crutch. He
pushes the crutch away, stands unsurely on his new limb and raises his blade.
They fight, Titus does well, his strength immense, but slips on the wet rocks.
Amryn sees his opportunity and with Titus’ own sword he stabs it into the new
arm. Titus writhes in pain, Amryn kicks Titus in the head, hard, knocking him
out. Titus slowly slips into the unruly water along the cragged rocks, caught
on the roughness of the shale. In his semi-lucidity he looks up into the sky
and sees above him, his daughter, being held by the same blood golem that
rushed him before. The golem reverts to a human form and taunts his capture of
Cassandra in a low born tongue. “Not again”, the voice of lily plays in his
head. Titus chants it, his consciousness returning and the blood in his body
starting to glow. As the blood gets to his new limbs the veins in the limbs start
to light into flames, he stands. Pulls his sword from his arm. He yells the
chant “NOT AGAIN” and launches himself into the air to the white ship.
EXT. THE WHITE SHIP DECK
Titus lands with a cracking thud on the
ship deck, steeping the landing with his burning leg in a kneeled position. The
scythe wielder, holds Fraga by the collar near the mast, battered and bruised.
He drops her, seeing the opportunity for greatness and the area starts to fill
with black. In an instant Titus leaps towards him, grabbing the amulet and smashing
it into the scythe warrior’s face, and pushing through until his head was one
with the mast. His body falls limp.
The golem changes to his blood form and
charges Titus with confidence, Titus rolls towards the golem, picks up the
scythe during the roll and slices the golem in two in the follow through. The
Golem reverts to its human form, split in half.
The captain doors open under the poop deck,
and with Cassandra in his cuff, he head hung low has he drags her, asking what
the hell the commotion is. With this slight of an opportunity Titus charges
forward off his living wood leg and rams his living wood arm into the chest of
Amryn, wrapping his hand around Amryn’s unloving heart. Amyrn smiles uneasily, “I
cannot die”. “Lilly demands otherwise!”, flames spout from Titus’ eyes and the
flames rush down his veins into his living arm, the living arm explodes in
flame and Titus rips out Blacktooth’s heart. Now a blackened ember, he crushes
it to ashes and Amryn falls forwards onto the deck, shattering like ice into
ashes.
EXT. ONYXIAN SHIP DECK
Rain pouring down, the blood pouring off Titus
as he sits with Cassandra in his arms. He looks up to the sky and smiles as
Cassandra’s arms tighten around him as she regains consciousness.
Zoom to distance, the mast the scythe
wielder’s head was smashed in to falls over. And the Onyxian fires a volley
into the white ship as they sail away.
FADE OUT:
The End
This is coming along really nicely, great work. Some suggestions for tightening it up before you add dialogue. Take out the camera moves and minimise the language so it reads like it is paced, get out all unnecessary people. I have emailed you a rewritten sample of the first page. Overall your script is coming along very well. Great work.
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